英语一对一辅导高考英语作文之求助信

写英文求助信的原因是目前自己遇到了一些困难,需要请求对方帮助。因此整篇文章应用一般现在时表达文意,当描述自己得到帮助后的进步时应用一般将来时。

 

[经典考题]                                 (悟一悟)

[典例] (2016·全国卷Ⅰ)假定你是李华,暑假想去一家外资公司兼职,已写好申请书和个人简历(resume)。给外教Ms Jenkins写信,请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。

注意:1.词数100左右;

2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

[满分范文]

Dear Ms Jenkins,

①I’m Li Hua and I plan to take a part­time job in a foreign capital company during the summer holiday. ②I have already filled in the application form and had my resume ready for it. ③However, I’m not sure about the words and format. ④Therefore, I’m writing to ask for your help and professional advice. ⑤Would you please spare some time to read through the materials attached? ⑥Would you mind finding out the mistakes in terms of words and format? ⑦Besides, I’d like you to correct the mistakes found in the materials. ⑧I’d be most grateful if you could do me a favor.

⑨I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua  

[阅卷评点]

③表示转折关系的过渡词,把前两句看似平淡的叙述提到了一定的高度,很好地为下句做了铺垫。

④therefore关系明确,因果适当,不但使上下文融会贯通,而且突出了写信目的。

⑤Would you please do ...?是请求别人帮助的句型,用得恰到好处,符合说话者的身份;过去分词attached作定语,使句子更加简练地道,增加了文章的可读性。

⑥Would you mind doing ...?不同的句式表达了相同的意思,避免了表达形式的单一化,语气委婉。

⑧这是文章提档次的句子。most grateful道出了作者希望得到帮助的迫切和感激之情,也显示了作者较高的语言运用能力。

[增分佳句]                                    (背一背)

1.开头部分常用语:

(1)My name is ...I’m writing to you for some help.

我叫……,写信的目的是向你寻求一些帮助。

(2)I’m writing a letter to you to ask you to do me a favor.

我给你写信想请你帮我一个忙。

2.寻求帮助常用语:

(1)Faced with so much difficulty, I have to ask you for help.

面对这么多的困难,我不得不向你求助。

(2)In the meanwhile/At the same time, I beg you to ... so that ... Also, I would like you to ...

同时,我恳求你……以便……我也想让你……

(3)I would like you to introduce some good ways to learn grammar.

我想让你给我介绍一些学习语法的好方法。

3.结尾部分常用语:

(1)I’m sure with your help I can make great progress.

我相信在你的帮助下我会取得很大的进步。

(2)I will appreciate any of your help.

我将非常感谢你的一切帮助。

[热点押题]                                   (练一练)

假定你是李华。最近,你与父母之间关系紧张,甚至发生争吵。你决定给外国的笔友Charlie写一封信,向他求助。内容包括:

1.谈谈你目前遇到的问题;

2.针对如何改善与父母的关系向他求助。

注意:1.词数100左右,开头和结尾已经给出,不计入总词数;

2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。  

Dear Charlie,

How are you getting along?  

                                                        

I am looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

参考范文:

Dear Charlie,

How are you getting along? Recently I have quarreled with my parents, which makes me very annoyed. I am writing to ask you for help.

You know, my parents don’t allow me to go out and play with my friends at weekends. They think I should make full use of every minute to work on my lessons. However, I think I need to play with my friends so that I can relax myself after a week’s hard work at school and it is a good way for me to keep in touch with my friends. I know it is wrong to quarrel with them, but I don’t know what to do to persuade them to change their mind and develop a good relationship with them. Would you please offer me some advice?

I am looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

以上是淮南英语培训学校的英语一对一辅导名师宫灿灿点评分析

 

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